Are there any mistakes in this text? it is very important thank you.
In conclusion, even though the article was written by a specialist, Judith Newmann, it is written in clear and understandable terms for the consumer. Although the text contains specialized terminology and scientific digressions, the impact on the reader is very positive and the so-called readability is maintained. As it appears from my analysis, the writer was able to simplify both the topic and the language and at the same time she preserves the medical content. Therefore, I think that this article is a good example of the fact that medical and more in general scientific texts can be made simple and understandable for everybody. Moreover, it is of great interest in that it combines different aspects and perspectives of a topic which could be, at some extent, hardly accessible for non-specialized readers.
can you please correct i for me??!! thank you sooo much :))
Adam
I'd remove the phrase "so-called," and the line "the writer was able to simplify both the topic and the language and at the same time she preserves the medical content" is a little wordy. It sounds better as "the writer was able to simplify the topic and the language while preserving the medical content."
Also, "Moreover, it is of great interest in that it combines different aspects and perspectives of a topic which could be, at some extent, hardly accessible for non-specialized readers."
And the last sentence is a mess. Remove the "in" in "it is of great interest in that it combines..." and try to clean it up a bit.
Is this for an English as a second language course? Feel free to email me...
RichardH
Your grammar is generally good but I will offer the following changes for your consideration (listed in CAPS)
In conclusion, even though the article was written by a specialist, Judith Newmann, it is written in clear and understandable terms for the NON-TECHNICAL consumer. Although the text contains specialized terminology and scientific digressions, the impact on the reader is very positive and the so-called readability is maintained. As my analysis SHOWS, the writer was able to simplify both the topic and the language WHILE STILL PRESERVING the medical content. Therefore, I think this article is a good example of HOW medical TEXTS, and scientific texts IN GENERAL, can be made simple and understandable for everybody. Moreover, THIS ARTICLE is of great interest in that it combines different aspects and perspectives of a topic which could be, TO some extent, DIFFICULT FOR non-specialized readers TO OTHERWISE COMPREHEND.
I'm not sure about the point you are making in your last sentence, but I took a guess. Good luck with your summary.
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